Houses Near the End of California
Revision #1We pass dumps,lodges, once white homesbuilt in WW II. We stop besideone that promises Assisted Living.A leaf blower shuttles cut grassfrom the newly seeded lawn,my wife hums the song about...
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A---love the song, especially her version.i believe this story is true:you know her great weakness for French Legionnaires---one she studied for a long time---his tattoo read:unknown, still freethanks...
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Hi Bernie, Such a sad poem. How about if you cheered up the first stanza, maybe with this glorious fall which relates to your cited song and the seasons in your final strophe? You are so eternally...
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B i think you have this almost just right wondering why you chose carbolic instead of just sahying disinfectent or even mentioning an actual brand name? i think maybe the first stanza could use some...
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Hi Bernie A moving poem, very nicely done. I especially like the delicately expressed "A gentle scent of carbolic, sounds / of rubber wheels on the linoleum," which says so much to conjure up the...
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J---H---Chris---Johanna---good idea. i just posted my early draft of the poem, the long version as i call it. gee, still seems awfully depressing. i don't really know how to make a line from a song...
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Hi Bernie I liked the poem especially the second stanza and the last two stanzas of the revised version. Ambika
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Absolutely love this, Bernie."The administrator's desk is gougedwith a plastic Dorothy Perkins rosein an empty water glass.Coleslaw in a cup, chili con carnethat won a high school bake off."All that I...
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